Talk:Human Rights Watch

First (instructor) evaluation comments

Hi Thomas,

Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the sections you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages.

• The "History" section is on the right track, but still very underdeveloped. You might say a bit more about how and why the organization's founding came about (and move the discussion under the "Founding" subheading) and then create additional subsections chronicling HRW's development since the late 1980s.
• Same goes for the "Current activities and objectives" section, which could be a lot more elaborate in its discussion of the HRW reports and its health-related activities.
• In addition to naming the current executive director, the "Organizational structure" section might include some information about the organization's leadership roles more generally.

Shamira Gelbman 22:47, 4 October 2009 (UTC)