Talk:Human Rights Watch

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 Definition Nonprofit nongovernmental organization dedicated to protecting human rights around the world. [d] [e]
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First (instructor) evaluation comments

Hi Thomas,

Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the sections you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages.

  • The "History" section is on the right track, but still very underdeveloped. You might say a bit more about how and why the organization's founding came about (and move the discussion under the "Founding" subheading) and then create additional subsections chronicling HRW's development since the late 1980s.
  • Same goes for the "Current activities and objectives" section, which could be a lot more elaborate in its discussion of the HRW reports and its health-related activities.
  • In addition to naming the current executive director, the "Organizational structure" section might include some information about the organization's leadership roles more generally.

Shamira Gelbman 22:47, 4 October 2009 (UTC)

Second (peer) evaluation comments

1. I think this encyclopedia entry is very organized and informative. I can tell that she has done her research and even cares for the interest group she is writing about. I do think that more work in the Founding section needs to be added. There are a couple other sections that have not even been started. 2. I think she did a great job in describing everything in neautral and descriptive terms. I feel like this entry is meant for all ages. 3. I feel that the beginning entry relies on the reader having the knowledge of knowing what NGO and HRW are. The article need to be finished, I feel like there are other aspects to this interest group that have not been researched. 4. I think it is important to include examples. I know that the accomplishments of this interest group in remarkable. I think this section is where the reader can learn the most in understanding why this interest group exists and what it has done for our country. 5. I think this was a good entry to getthe basics of the unformation I need, but I do feel like my research was needed in order to write my opinion essay. Caitlin Ryan 02:58, 2 November 2009 (UTC)

Related Articles and a few links of interest

Do look at the computer-generated Related Articles page, and, I suspect, if you do searches for "Human Rights Watch" in the search box, you'll get even more information. One interesting HRW person is Dan McNeill, who went to work for them after commanding U.S. forces in Afghanistan. Howard C. Berkowitz 01:27, 5 October 2009 (UTC)

Nobel prize

The 1997 prize went to the International Campaign to Ban Landmines and it's founding coordinator Jody Williams - what has HRW got to do with it? David Finn 09:56, 13 September 2010 (UTC)

Perhaps this should go into mine (land warfare) and out of this article. Howard C. Berkowitz 12:20, 13 September 2010 (UTC)