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Do look at the computer-generated Related Articles page, and, I suspect, if you do searches for "Human Rights Watch" in the search box, you'll get even more information. One interesting HRW person is [[Dan McNeill]], who went to work for them after commanding U.S. forces in Afghanistan. [[User:Howard C. Berkowitz|Howard C. Berkowitz]] 01:27, 5 October 2009 (UTC) |
Revision as of 20:27, 4 October 2009
First (instructor) evaluation comments
Hi Thomas,
Here are some suggestions for further improvements to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the sections you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages.
- The "History" section is on the right track, but still very underdeveloped. You might say a bit more about how and why the organization's founding came about (and move the discussion under the "Founding" subheading) and then create additional subsections chronicling HRW's development since the late 1980s.
- Same goes for the "Current activities and objectives" section, which could be a lot more elaborate in its discussion of the HRW reports and its health-related activities.
- In addition to naming the current executive director, the "Organizational structure" section might include some information about the organization's leadership roles more generally.
Shamira Gelbman 22:47, 4 October 2009 (UTC)
Second (peer) evaluation comments
Related Articles and a few links of interest
Do look at the computer-generated Related Articles page, and, I suspect, if you do searches for "Human Rights Watch" in the search box, you'll get even more information. One interesting HRW person is Dan McNeill, who went to work for them after commanding U.S. forces in Afghanistan. Howard C. Berkowitz 01:27, 5 October 2009 (UTC)