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==First (instructor) evaluation comments== | |||
Hi Caitlin, | |||
Here are some suggestions for further improvement to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the section you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages. | |||
* The intro is off to a pretty good start; however, you might explain a bit more about what you mean by considering gun violence a public health issue in addition to a crime issue. | |||
* Overall, the information contained in the "current objectives and activities" section could be much more reader-friendly. There's a bit too much going on in each paragraph and the second one, especially, seems to be more of a list of events than an explanation of what the VPC is currently doing. | |||
[[User:Shamira Gelbman|Shamira Gelbman]] 01:03, 5 October 2009 (UTC) | |||
==Second (peer) evaluation comments== |
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First (instructor) evaluation comments
Hi Caitlin,
Here are some suggestions for further improvement to your encyclopedia entry draft. I'm going to stick to the section you've already begun developing; keep in mind, though, that you still need to fill in the others as well as the related articles, bibliography, and external links subpages.
- The intro is off to a pretty good start; however, you might explain a bit more about what you mean by considering gun violence a public health issue in addition to a crime issue.
- Overall, the information contained in the "current objectives and activities" section could be much more reader-friendly. There's a bit too much going on in each paragraph and the second one, especially, seems to be more of a list of events than an explanation of what the VPC is currently doing.
Shamira Gelbman 01:03, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
Second (peer) evaluation comments
Categories:
- Stub Articles
- Internal Articles
- Politics Stub Articles
- Politics Internal Articles
- Eduzendium Stub Articles
- Eduzendium Internal Articles
- Need def
- Politics need def
- Eduzendium need def
- Need rel
- Politics need rel
- Eduzendium need rel
- Need bib
- Politics need bib
- Eduzendium need bib
- Need ext
- Politics need ext
- Eduzendium need ext